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A tightened feeling angered me withinas soon as I revealed my thoughts to you.We parted. With an illusory sin,I'd go on to exist. Oh, that I knew.Depleted, I retired in my roompursuing ways to clear...
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Legend,L2 has me wondering what thoughts are concerned, which also makes understanding of what follows ("illusory sin", e.g.) difficult. Could you not be a bit more specific?"I chose a disk of a...
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L61--I don't believe a sonnet can ever be "too personal," but it can often over-generalize. The effectiveness of any poem often rests in how much the reader can visualize (or feel, hear, taste, etc.)...
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Remco, Mike,Thank you for commenting. It is really amazing how things show. When I wrote this sonnet, I was not clear on what I wanted to say. I had no fixed thoughts. And it really took me a lot of...
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Legend--Just so. Often in poetry workshops, I've heard the suggestion that we not simply apply band-aids to works that have come out stillborn. There are better poems in you that want to come out....
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